Tuesday, September 1, 2015

Zach Wiegert. Josh Wiegman. Summary Response for Bully

Summary Response Outline


Summary:
  • Topic sentence: Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch, portrays the very real problem of bullying through the stories of it’s victims.
  • The stories show how terrible bullying really is. Some even prove that bullying can lead to self-hate, problems with families, and even suicide.


Response:
  • Topic sentence: title Bully, author directed by Lee Hirsch, strong verb , agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays) the problem of bullying because It tells the awful stories of children victimized. .
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up- Bullying is an epidemic affecting many students in the United States as well as the world, and can lead to children feeling like they are not good enough
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “I feel like I belong somewhere else,”(Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim: Alex implies that because he doesn’t fit in, he doesn’t think he belongs at school, or maybe not anywhere.
  • Counterclaim 1:
    • Set-up  However, many school officials believe that bullying is just kids being kids and rough-housing. They have even held meetings and assemblies about anti-bullying and have confronted bullies and their parents.
    • Evidence: Lead-in "Boys will be boys,"(Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim-
These boys are just horsing around calling each other names, and having some rough fun. Although some of these “bullies” might take it too far at times, many parents believe that their boys are just trying to connect with children that they don’t know, and so they are rough to try to see what the other kid is like.

A common view is that bullying is just a way that kids mess around with each other as friends. We cannot deny that sometimes this is the situation and that there really is no ill-intent. However, it can be much more severe than that. The stories of children like Tyler and Alex prove this. Alex said that he was starting to not feel anything anymore. Tyler committed suicide at the age of 17. Bullying is not a joke. It’s not just “boys being boys.”


  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Clearly bullying is a large scale problem that affects millions of children throughout the world. With the help of many people, bullying can be stopped.

1 comment:

  1. Good concise summary- I am missing a concluding sentence.

    Good response topic sentence. You need to spend more time setting up the situation in the quotation and developing an explanation that supports your response point. Do the same for your counterclaim- you aren't providing enough context and explanation for your reader. Good rebuttal- keep pushing those thoughts out to provide more support. Good conclusion. Eliminate personal words.

    14/20

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