Thursday, September 10, 2015

Zach Wiegert, Jordan Melvin Othello Act 1 S/R

  • Topic sentence: William Shakespeare’s, Othello presents the concept that jealousy controls other's desires.
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas: Iago, wishes revenge upon Othello, because he has appointed Cassio to a rank Iago believes belongs to him, while Roderigo is jealous of Othello’s relationship with Desdemona.

  • Topic sentence:  Othello, written by William Shakespeare, portrays how jealousy and a desire for revenge fuel our choices.
  • Claim 1: Roderigo show this jealousy through his hatred of Othello’s relationship with Desdemona.
    • Set-up- Roderigo is so envious of the love between Desdemona and Othello that he would rather kill Othello than have him continue to cause Roderigo emotional torment.
    • Evidence: Lead-in While speaking with Iago about how they feel about Othello and some of the choices he has made, he exclaims, “By heaven, I rather would have been his hangman.”(Shakespeare, 1.1.36)
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim  Roderigo is saying that he wishes he could’ve killed Othello rather than him taking Desdemona as his wife. This proves his immense jealousy of Othello and how Roderigo wishes to enact revenge upon him.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, Even though Roderigo is so jealous of Othello he has a desire to kill him, we can also see that Roderigo does have second thoughts about getting revenge.
    • Set-up To get back at Othello, Roderigo and Iago wake Brabantio and tell him that his daughter, Desdemona has escaped his house and is now with Othello. While speaking to Brabantio, Roderigo begins to have second doubts and Iago speaks for him.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  Roderigo does not speak as strongly and aggressively as Iago, who shouts things at Brabantio like “... you’ll have your daughter covered with a Barbary horse. You’ll have have your nephews neigh to you. You’ll have coursers for cousins and gennets for germans.” (Shakespeare 125-127)
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: Iago speaking for Roderigo shows that he is not jealous as he says he is. His second doubts show that he is somewhat willing to forgive Othello for taking Desdemona from him.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?: A common view is that Roderigo’s second thoughts about the murder of Othello disprove his jealousy. We cannot deny that this conclusion has some merit to it. Maybe his second thoughts really did lessen his envy.This interpretation is helpful, but it misses an important point.  Jealousy to that extent doesn’t just go away. If one desires to kill someone else over an issue, that is jealousy that cannot be easily undone. Second thoughts can’t help that. It cannot be denied Roderigo’s envy is overpowering.
Concluding sentence: Roderigo’s jealousy of Othello and Desdemona’s marriage proves that Shakespeare does show how envy and a desire for retribution do control our lives.

1 comment:

  1. Good start to your summary. Watch incorrect comma usage and you are missing a concluding sentence.

    Where is the why to your response topic sentence? Make sure to eliminate all personal words. Additionally, make sure to include correct citations for your quotations. These need to be looked at.

    I am not sure with your counterclaim how you prove your argument. Can you be more explicit with what you are trying to get across. Eliminate personal words throughout. Make sure your concluding sentence ties back to author and title.


    Punctuate title correctly.